This looks like it will be a great Storybook! I’m excited to hear about all of these love stories. I really like the way you set up the introduction by having women talking about “celebrities.” It is very relatable to modern day that these women are gossiping and getting things wrong about the stories. There was a lot of dialogue in the introduction which made it much more interesting than just plain writing. I also really liked the first story you wrote (Medea’s story). I thought it was a good touch to add dialogue of the original gossiping women throughout the story. It will be really cool to see how the frame story develops throughout the Storybook. I have just a few technical notes that I noticed while reading Medea. A few times throughout the story, you say “women” when it should be “woman.” Also, take a look at this one sentence in particular: “After removing the old man’s blood and replenishing it with magic herbs, Aeson was as good as new.” I think that the way you have the comma in this sentence is saying that Aeson removed and replenished his own blood. You could say something like, “After Medea removed the old man’s blood” so it’s not a dangling modifier. Overall, great job! I look forward to reading more of your stories.
Your storybook looks like it will be very interesting! I like the Gossip Girl feel that it has to it haha. I haven't seen the show yet but I've heard that it is good because of all the drama that occurs in it. And since you are doing it on the rumors of the famous people's relationships, there are a lot of ways that you could go with it and make it interesting. This was a very good idea on how to create your storyboard. I like how you added the dialogue to your story. It makes it easier to follow and makes it more interesting. I'm really excited to read more of your story. It seems like it will be very interesting to read and I'm excited to see where it goes. There are a few grammar mistakes, but other than that, it's very well written.
Your introduction was very interesting. To be honest, I was a bit lost when I begun reading it. I did not know where it was going and I was lost on who was who and what was happening. As I read on I realized that this was purposeful but even so I did not like the very beginning of the introduction. It felt like it was all over the place. The introduction of the old women was very ambiguous. Who is she? Was she eavesdropping since the beginning? The grammar, spelling and paragraph breaks were excellent as far as I could tell. I would just work on hashing out some of the details. Your website looked great. The background image was fitting and the font stood out against the background. The image you chose for the introduction was perfect. It really pulled me into the city were the ladies were gossiping. Good job.
I love how you are continuing to develop your frame story throughout each new story you tell. The three women and the narrator add a lot of humor and interest without distracting from the stories being told. I can picture this being a movie like The Princess Bride. It is interesting how you have the narrator change one woman into a pomegranate because the readers still don’t know who the narrator is and this gives us a hint that she is powerful. On a technical note, check the wording of the first paragraph. I think it should be something like “When her mother was pregnant, her father had a deep desire for a boy to be born.” Also, in paragraph seven, you say “her” when it should be “his” (talking about Atlanta’s father). In the paragraph under the picture, I think you mean “precious” when you say “precarious.” Overall, great job!
I am SO impressed by your storybook! It is so well developed and it seems completely finished to me. I can't believe you have gotten your storybook so far already. I wish mine had more content to it. I like how every story is connected to the next one and I also like how the Introduction leaves you kind of wondering if the women will even meet with the old woman to hear her stories. I think that all of the pictures fit perfectly with each story. All of the pictures depicted the women and their significant others. The Introduction picture is also good because it depicts a Greek goddess. The font was easy to read and so was each of your stories. I really appreciated the dialogue parts of your stories. It created a realistic interaction between the characters and that is an area in my own writing that I'm lacking in skills. I'm learning a lot from how you write your stories. I really have no criticisms of your storybook, which doesn't really help you much unfortunately. I like it just the way it is now. I also like how you tied in the title with the characters from the stories and with the dialogue too. The women were gossiping about the different goddesses. It all fit together nicely. Good job!
Stoffel, I am leaving a comment for the extra credit this week. Thank you for all of your feedback on my work this semester. All of it was helpful and I took in your notes. I am also very impressed with all of your work this semester. I hope to read more of your project as the semester goes on. Great job!
I am glad to have the opportunity to read another one of your stories and am looking forward to reading the finale next week! I love the dialogue you added between the goddess and the women when the goddess reminds them that they need to experience the full spectrum of life’s emotions. That reminds me of a discussion we had in my Cognitive Science of Fiction course about the paradox of tragedy (or why people enjoy tragic fiction). The way the women talk about this tragedy throughout your story really makes it seem like they are talking about real people, which is great for your story’s premise. I also love how you added in that the two lovers were able to talk to each other while they walked back to Earth. This way, even though Eurydice was taken away, they got to share a few last moments with each other. Great job! One quick criticism, though: where are the cats in your Storybook Project?!
Your introduction and overall idea for your storybook is fresh and original; the idea of gossiping Greeks in mythology is something I'd never thought about, and it gave a new spin to these stories. It seems like most of the myths you covered are typically narrated in third person with little room for nonsensical gossip, but you did a good job of incorporating this humorous element into your stories while retaining a sense of the overall plot line.
I just read "Andromeda," and I thought that compared to the introduction it had had very little dialogue. I was surprised by all the cold, hard narration…it didn't give too much room for character development through dialogue. Also, I thought that perhaps a few of the paragraphs were a bit long; especially the one bordering the image you included beside the text.
One other critique I have is that the description and visual imagery seems to take a back seat to the action per se; I would've liked to have experienced the characters' plights through my mind's eye, and I believe this is best facilitated by descriptive writing about general landscapes and scenes.
I haven't even started reading your storybook yet, but the name Gossip Greeks has me super intrigued! Okay, finally read your introduction and Medea. Your intro is great! Now i'm all kinds of interested in the gossip surrounding the Greeks. Also, I really like your image and background. It all looks really nice and goes well together. Your retelling of the story of Medea was great as well. I love your take on it, and I'm enjoying the way you're blending all of these stories together. Also, I like how you split up your paragraphs with spaces. It makes reading and following along in your story much easier. I'm curious, so I've already started reading the other stories in your storybook. They are great as well, but I'll hold off on specific comments just incase I have to write over them later. Good luck with the rest of your semester!
Stoffel, I saw the name of your storybook and it was super interesting and I was excited to read it right from the start. I read the introduction and your first story Medea. I think you did a great job in your introduction of drawing in the reader and catching their interest. Your dialogue was great between the different gossiping women, and I loved that you included the older woman who would tell the real stories of these celebrities. The character development was great in the introduction and then in your first story as well. I thought you had a great transition from the introduction into talking about the real story Medea.
In Medea, I loved how you told the story, breaking it up to hear from the three different gossiping women. I thought this added a great dimension to your story overall. I think how you developed the story and split up the paragraphs made it easy for the reader to understand and comprehend. Also, I think the overall design of your storybook is great. Great job overall!
I’m sad that this is the last story and I won’t be able to read your project next time. I like the changes you made to this story and agree that these changes put the focus more on Andromeda and Perseus’ love for each other. I’m glad you ended your project with a happy story. I have a few notes of constructive criticism. I would suggest changing “Not long after she was chained to the rock” to “Not long after, the once-still water” because you just told readers that she was chained to the rock. There doesn’t seem to be a need to repeat this information. Also, “A terrifying creature that must’ve been five buildings tall with eight slimy tentacles” is a fragment. You should add a comma between “care” and “my” in Hera’s final quotation. I like how you ended by the old woman leaving a little clue as to who she is. People well versed in mythology will know right away while others can get the information from your author’s note. Good job! (But seriously, where are the cats?)
Hello Stoffel. I really liked your idea of gossiping Greek women. The title is what drew me to your story because it reminded me of the Gossip Girl show and books. I enjoyed your introduction. The market place setting was a great setup for finding gossiping women. The dialogue you added between the gossiping woman and the narrator was a nice touch. The back and forth looks and comments between the two added a nice touch of humor to your story. Another thing that I really liked is that your stories’ main characters are strong females of Greek mythology. It is always nice to read a story that has a strong female lead or leads. All too often, stories concentrate more on the male heroes and or Gods of Greek mythology. I only read the introduction and the first story of your storybook project but I really enjoyed them and am interested in reading more to see how this storybook plays out.
What a wonderful idea for a storybook. I believe that since there are so many love stories in Greek mythology that a lot of gossip really did happen. Clearly, if it did not happen, there are many chances where it could of. The background of your storybook really fits your topic well. The pictures that were selected did a good job of symbolizing the stories. I really enjoyed reading your introduction and Medea. I was impressed with your writing. It is easy to read and the spacing helps the flow of the stories. I like how Medea was just a retelling of the original. You did well at making it your own, while keeping the main story. I enjoyed the extra input from all of the girls. This made the story interesting to read. The author’s note was very informative of the original story and what you did to change up your story. Good job! I cannot wait to read more of the stories.
This concept for a storybook is hilarious. I actually remember a few movies I watched in middle school about Greek Mythology that features the gods gossiping about each other and the humans on earth. Clever idea.
I liked the picture you chose of the statue of the goddess. That statue looks huge. I think it'd be awesome to travel to Greece and see grand statues like this in person and learn about them by experiencing them first hand.
I read the Eurydice story that you wrote. I was drawn to it because I have actually seen a play of this story before and was curious how you would take the story and put your own twist on it. I really enjoyed the perspective you brought to the story by having two women discuss it. I think its an intriguing way to learn about the story. I laughed out loud a few times. Good job putting a little comedy in there.
I look forward to reading more of your stories in the future!
Stoffel, This is the first time I have seen this storybook and I really enjoyed it. I really like the idea of how the storytelling came about in your storybook that you showed in your introduction. Having the ladies gossiping and one wanting to set the record straight is a great concept. I really liked the layout of your site. It was easy to navigate and the background picture was a really nice touch. I read the story of Andromeda while I was at your site. The content of your story was great. The way you incorporated dialogue between characters made the story really amusing. The way you break up the storytelling with the interjections from the other women keeps your story from being a few large paragraphs which makes it much easier to read and the story flow. Your picture selection was also very well done. It made me really be able to picture the story while reading. Great job on your storybook!
Hi Stoffel! I love your storybook!! This was such a great idea! Your stories have been absolutely amazing!! You were super creative with this idea! I've loved reading about the one woman telling all the other ladies about the truth of all the people of Greece. Your layout is awesome! It goes so well with the theme of your story! I read Medea and I really enjoyed it! I have;t read the original, but I know a little about it. Your writing is great! I love how you have dialogue in your story! It makes the story much better and really brings it to life. You did a great job with this storybook! I look forward to reading more of it!
Hey Stoffel! I think your storybook is awesome. I feel like the way I analyze the stories are basically gossiping. A lot of the gossiping in your storybook are things that I have thought, and I think it is pretty funny to read it as if some women are gossiping to each other. One of my favorite parts of your introduction was when one of the women complained about Orpheus turning around and if only Eurydice had been loved by a real man. I remember commenting on his willpower in one of my reading diaries. Your storybook is hilarious to me and reminded me of a reality TV show on MTV or one of those Real Housewives shows. The pictures you chose on your different pages were perfect illustrations, especially in the Introduction. Also, good job with the dialogue. It is really easy to follow and describes each situation very well. I could picture a bunch of girls gossiping throughout each story. Overall, I thought you did an awesome job.
For starters I love your introduction! It’s simple but at the same time it presents everything you need to get across in a clear and concise thought. From your introduction your reader knows what you’re going to be talking about and that it will be real stories from Greek mythology. I also love the way you set the stage because it seems like something that could have very well occurred naturally back then. Additionally I read your first story about Jason and Medea. I had never heard that story before so you did a really good job of telling it! I felt like I was actually in your storybook setting wanting to know more and more about what happened! You pauses for interjections were perfectly timed and really made the story authentic and stay true to your storybook setting. I also appreciated your authors note defining the different endings from your version to the original.
Stoffel, I really enjoyed reading your introduction. I thought the dialogue was very well done. I also like how your title "Gossip Greeks" is exactly what the story is about. It is interesting that you incorporated "modern" gossip talk into these ancient times. I feel like you chose the perfect image for what is happening within the introduction. The set up for the next story was perfect!
I just read your first story "Medea" and enjoyed it. Again, I like how you brought the dialogue into the story. This made the story seem very realistic and kept reminding me that there are people sitting around gossiping. Also, I was actually blown away by the amount of facts you used throughout your story. It was interesting how you brought in so many sources to tell this one story. Anyways, the story was very well written and great job!
Hi Stoffel, Thank you for the comments that you gave me on my story about Christine the Faithful. I did feel a deep connection to the character. I'm happy that I was able to portray that in my story. Thank you for the positive feedback on my writing style and connection to the storyline. I'm always grateful to receive constructive criticism and/or praise on my work because it always makes my writing and stories better. I can also tell from your own writing style that you use these techniques yourself. Your stories seems to flow effortlessly and I love to read your work. You have a gift for writing and it shows in all of the stories you have written. Again, thanks!
Since we are in the same group this week I might as well say that I appreciate your comment on my storybook last week! Thanks for the detailed and in depth response you gave. It is always great to get feedback from other people. Also, I did just add a new story last night so be sure to go ahead and check that out next week for the assignment. Again, thanks for the help!
This looks like it will be a great Storybook! I’m excited to hear about all of these love stories. I really like the way you set up the introduction by having women talking about “celebrities.” It is very relatable to modern day that these women are gossiping and getting things wrong about the stories. There was a lot of dialogue in the introduction which made it much more interesting than just plain writing. I also really liked the first story you wrote (Medea’s story). I thought it was a good touch to add dialogue of the original gossiping women throughout the story. It will be really cool to see how the frame story develops throughout the Storybook. I have just a few technical notes that I noticed while reading Medea. A few times throughout the story, you say “women” when it should be “woman.” Also, take a look at this one sentence in particular: “After removing the old man’s blood and replenishing it with magic herbs, Aeson was as good as new.” I think that the way you have the comma in this sentence is saying that Aeson removed and replenished his own blood. You could say something like, “After Medea removed the old man’s blood” so it’s not a dangling modifier. Overall, great job! I look forward to reading more of your stories.
ReplyDeleteYour storybook looks like it will be very interesting! I like the Gossip Girl feel that it has to it haha. I haven't seen the show yet but I've heard that it is good because of all the drama that occurs in it. And since you are doing it on the rumors of the famous people's relationships, there are a lot of ways that you could go with it and make it interesting. This was a very good idea on how to create your storyboard. I like how you added the dialogue to your story. It makes it easier to follow and makes it more interesting. I'm really excited to read more of your story. It seems like it will be very interesting to read and I'm excited to see where it goes. There are a few grammar mistakes, but other than that, it's very well written.
ReplyDeleteYour introduction was very interesting. To be honest, I was a bit lost when I begun reading it. I did not know where it was going and I was lost on who was who and what was happening. As I read on I realized that this was purposeful but even so I did not like the very beginning of the introduction. It felt like it was all over the place. The introduction of the old women was very ambiguous. Who is she? Was she eavesdropping since the beginning? The grammar, spelling and paragraph breaks were excellent as far as I could tell. I would just work on hashing out some of the details. Your website looked great. The background image was fitting and the font stood out against the background. The image you chose for the introduction was perfect. It really pulled me into the city were the ladies were gossiping. Good job.
ReplyDeleteI love how you are continuing to develop your frame story throughout each new story you tell. The three women and the narrator add a lot of humor and interest without distracting from the stories being told. I can picture this being a movie like The Princess Bride. It is interesting how you have the narrator change one woman into a pomegranate because the readers still don’t know who the narrator is and this gives us a hint that she is powerful. On a technical note, check the wording of the first paragraph. I think it should be something like “When her mother was pregnant, her father had a deep desire for a boy to be born.” Also, in paragraph seven, you say “her” when it should be “his” (talking about Atlanta’s father). In the paragraph under the picture, I think you mean “precious” when you say “precarious.” Overall, great job!
ReplyDeleteI am SO impressed by your storybook! It is so well developed and it seems completely finished to me. I can't believe you have gotten your storybook so far already. I wish mine had more content to it. I like how every story is connected to the next one and I also like how the Introduction leaves you kind of wondering if the women will even meet with the old woman to hear her stories.
ReplyDeleteI think that all of the pictures fit perfectly with each story. All of the pictures depicted the women and their significant others. The Introduction picture is also good because it depicts a Greek goddess. The font was easy to read and so was each of your stories.
I really appreciated the dialogue parts of your stories. It created a realistic interaction between the characters and that is an area in my own writing that I'm lacking in skills. I'm learning a lot from how you write your stories.
I really have no criticisms of your storybook, which doesn't really help you much unfortunately. I like it just the way it is now.
I also like how you tied in the title with the characters from the stories and with the dialogue too. The women were gossiping about the different goddesses. It all fit together nicely. Good job!
Stoffel, I am leaving a comment for the extra credit this week. Thank you for all of your feedback on my work this semester. All of it was helpful and I took in your notes. I am also very impressed with all of your work this semester. I hope to read more of your project as the semester goes on. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI am glad to have the opportunity to read another one of your stories and am looking forward to reading the finale next week! I love the dialogue you added between the goddess and the women when the goddess reminds them that they need to experience the full spectrum of life’s emotions. That reminds me of a discussion we had in my Cognitive Science of Fiction course about the paradox of tragedy (or why people enjoy tragic fiction). The way the women talk about this tragedy throughout your story really makes it seem like they are talking about real people, which is great for your story’s premise. I also love how you added in that the two lovers were able to talk to each other while they walked back to Earth. This way, even though Eurydice was taken away, they got to share a few last moments with each other. Great job! One quick criticism, though: where are the cats in your Storybook Project?!
ReplyDeleteStoffel,
ReplyDeleteYour introduction and overall idea for your storybook is fresh and original; the idea of gossiping Greeks in mythology is something I'd never thought about, and it gave a new spin to these stories. It seems like most of the myths you covered are typically narrated in third person with little room for nonsensical gossip, but you did a good job of incorporating this humorous element into your stories while retaining a sense of the overall plot line.
I just read "Andromeda," and I thought that compared to the introduction it had had very little dialogue. I was surprised by all the cold, hard narration…it didn't give too much room for character development through dialogue. Also, I thought that perhaps a few of the paragraphs were a bit long; especially the one bordering the image you included beside the text.
One other critique I have is that the description and visual imagery seems to take a back seat to the action per se; I would've liked to have experienced the characters' plights through my mind's eye, and I believe this is best facilitated by descriptive writing about general landscapes and scenes.
I haven't even started reading your storybook yet, but the name Gossip Greeks has me super intrigued!
ReplyDeleteOkay, finally read your introduction and Medea.
Your intro is great! Now i'm all kinds of interested in the gossip surrounding the Greeks. Also, I really like your image and background. It all looks really nice and goes well together.
Your retelling of the story of Medea was great as well. I love your take on it, and I'm enjoying the way you're blending all of these stories together.
Also, I like how you split up your paragraphs with spaces. It makes reading and following along in your story much easier.
I'm curious, so I've already started reading the other stories in your storybook. They are great as well, but I'll hold off on specific comments just incase I have to write over them later.
Good luck with the rest of your semester!
Stoffel, I saw the name of your storybook and it was super interesting and I was excited to read it right from the start. I read the introduction and your first story Medea. I think you did a great job in your introduction of drawing in the reader and catching their interest. Your dialogue was great between the different gossiping women, and I loved that you included the older woman who would tell the real stories of these celebrities. The character development was great in the introduction and then in your first story as well. I thought you had a great transition from the introduction into talking about the real story Medea.
ReplyDeleteIn Medea, I loved how you told the story, breaking it up to hear from the three different gossiping women. I thought this added a great dimension to your story overall. I think how you developed the story and split up the paragraphs made it easy for the reader to understand and comprehend. Also, I think the overall design of your storybook is great. Great job overall!
I’m sad that this is the last story and I won’t be able to read your project next time. I like the changes you made to this story and agree that these changes put the focus more on Andromeda and Perseus’ love for each other. I’m glad you ended your project with a happy story. I have a few notes of constructive criticism. I would suggest changing “Not long after she was chained to the rock” to “Not long after, the once-still water” because you just told readers that she was chained to the rock. There doesn’t seem to be a need to repeat this information. Also, “A terrifying creature that must’ve been five buildings tall with eight slimy tentacles” is a fragment. You should add a comma between “care” and “my” in Hera’s final quotation. I like how you ended by the old woman leaving a little clue as to who she is. People well versed in mythology will know right away while others can get the information from your author’s note. Good job! (But seriously, where are the cats?)
ReplyDeleteHello Stoffel.
ReplyDeleteI really liked your idea of gossiping Greek women. The title is what drew me to your story because it reminded me of the Gossip Girl show and books. I enjoyed your introduction. The market place setting was a great setup for finding gossiping women. The dialogue you added between the gossiping woman and the narrator was a nice touch. The back and forth looks and comments between the two added a nice touch of humor to your story. Another thing that I really liked is that your stories’ main characters are strong females of Greek mythology. It is always nice to read a story that has a strong female lead or leads. All too often, stories concentrate more on the male heroes and or Gods of Greek mythology. I only read the introduction and the first story of your storybook project but I really enjoyed them and am interested in reading more to see how this storybook plays out.
What a wonderful idea for a storybook. I believe that since there are so many love stories in Greek mythology that a lot of gossip really did happen. Clearly, if it did not happen, there are many chances where it could of. The background of your storybook really fits your topic well. The pictures that were selected did a good job of symbolizing the stories. I really enjoyed reading your introduction and Medea. I was impressed with your writing. It is easy to read and the spacing helps the flow of the stories. I like how Medea was just a retelling of the original. You did well at making it your own, while keeping the main story. I enjoyed the extra input from all of the girls. This made the story interesting to read. The author’s note was very informative of the original story and what you did to change up your story. Good job! I cannot wait to read more of the stories.
ReplyDeleteHey Stoffel!
ReplyDeleteThis concept for a storybook is hilarious. I actually remember a few movies I watched in middle school about Greek Mythology that features the gods gossiping about each other and the humans on earth. Clever idea.
I liked the picture you chose of the statue of the goddess. That statue looks huge. I think it'd be awesome to travel to Greece and see grand statues like this in person and learn about them by experiencing them first hand.
I read the Eurydice story that you wrote. I was drawn to it because I have actually seen a play of this story before and was curious how you would take the story and put your own twist on it. I really enjoyed the perspective you brought to the story by having two women discuss it. I think its an intriguing way to learn about the story. I laughed out loud a few times. Good job putting a little comedy in there.
I look forward to reading more of your stories in the future!
Stoffel,
ReplyDeleteThis is the first time I have seen this storybook and I really enjoyed it. I really like the idea of how the storytelling came about in your storybook that you showed in your introduction. Having the ladies gossiping and one wanting to set the record straight is a great concept. I really liked the layout of your site. It was easy to navigate and the background picture was a really nice touch.
I read the story of Andromeda while I was at your site. The content of your story was great. The way you incorporated dialogue between characters made the story really amusing. The way you break up the storytelling with the interjections from the other women keeps your story from being a few large paragraphs which makes it much easier to read and the story flow. Your picture selection was also very well done. It made me really be able to picture the story while reading. Great job on your storybook!
Hi Stoffel! I love your storybook!! This was such a great idea! Your stories have been absolutely amazing!! You were super creative with this idea! I've loved reading about the one woman telling all the other ladies about the truth of all the people of Greece. Your layout is awesome! It goes so well with the theme of your story! I read Medea and I really enjoyed it! I have;t read the original, but I know a little about it. Your writing is great! I love how you have dialogue in your story! It makes the story much better and really brings it to life. You did a great job with this storybook! I look forward to reading more of it!
ReplyDeleteHey Stoffel! I think your storybook is awesome. I feel like the way I analyze the stories are basically gossiping. A lot of the gossiping in your storybook are things that I have thought, and I think it is pretty funny to read it as if some women are gossiping to each other. One of my favorite parts of your introduction was when one of the women complained about Orpheus turning around and if only Eurydice had been loved by a real man. I remember commenting on his willpower in one of my reading diaries. Your storybook is hilarious to me and reminded me of a reality TV show on MTV or one of those Real Housewives shows. The pictures you chose on your different pages were perfect illustrations, especially in the Introduction. Also, good job with the dialogue. It is really easy to follow and describes each situation very well. I could picture a bunch of girls gossiping throughout each story. Overall, I thought you did an awesome job.
ReplyDeleteFor starters I love your introduction! It’s simple but at the same time it presents everything you need to get across in a clear and concise thought. From your introduction your reader knows what you’re going to be talking about and that it will be real stories from Greek mythology. I also love the way you set the stage because it seems like something that could have very well occurred naturally back then. Additionally I read your first story about Jason and Medea. I had never heard that story before so you did a really good job of telling it! I felt like I was actually in your storybook setting wanting to know more and more about what happened! You pauses for interjections were perfectly timed and really made the story authentic and stay true to your storybook setting. I also appreciated your authors note defining the different endings from your version to the original.
ReplyDeleteStoffel, I really enjoyed reading your introduction. I thought the dialogue was very well done. I also like how your title "Gossip Greeks" is exactly what the story is about. It is interesting that you incorporated "modern" gossip talk into these ancient times. I feel like you chose the perfect image for what is happening within the introduction. The set up for the next story was perfect!
ReplyDeleteI just read your first story "Medea" and enjoyed it. Again, I like how you brought the dialogue into the story. This made the story seem very realistic and kept reminding me that there are people sitting around gossiping. Also, I was actually blown away by the amount of facts you used throughout your story. It was interesting how you brought in so many sources to tell this one story. Anyways, the story was very well written and great job!
Hi Stoffel,
ReplyDeleteThank you for the comments that you gave me on my story about Christine the Faithful. I did feel a deep connection to the character. I'm happy that I was able to portray that in my story. Thank you for the positive feedback on my writing style and connection to the storyline. I'm always grateful to receive constructive criticism and/or praise on my work because it always makes my writing and stories better. I can also tell from your own writing style that you use these techniques yourself. Your stories seems to flow effortlessly and I love to read your work. You have a gift for writing and it shows in all of the stories you have written. Again, thanks!
Hey Stoffel,
ReplyDeleteSince we are in the same group this week I might as well say that I appreciate your comment on my storybook last week! Thanks for the detailed and in depth response you gave. It is always great to get feedback from other people. Also, I did just add a new story last night so be sure to go ahead and check that out next week for the assignment. Again, thanks for the help!